一、句子之間缺少過渡性的單詞或詞組

　?、?Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　② Salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　二、省字號的濫用

　?、?the governments plan

　?、?the plan of the government

　　三、代詞之間的性、數(shù)、格不一致

　?、?Everyone has their homework.

　?、?Everyone has his homework.

　　四、主句與從句的順序不當

　?、?Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

　　② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

　　五、雙重否定

　?、?Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　?、?Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　　六、修飾語、插入語的位置不當

　?、?The forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.

　　② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

　　七、意義含糊的先行詞

　?、?The band members collected his and her uniforms.

　　② The band members collected their uniforms.

　　八、介詞和冠詞的濫用

　?、?The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

　　② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

　　九、句子缺少成分

　?、?When aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.

　　② When aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.

　　十、忘記斷句

　?、?I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

　　② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

　　一、句子之間缺少過渡性的單詞或詞組

　?、?Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　② Salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　二、省字號的濫用

　　① the governments plan

　?、?the plan of the government

　　三、代詞之間的性、數(shù)、格不一致

　　① Everyone has their homework.

　?、?Everyone has his homework.

　　四、主句與從句的順序不當

　　① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

　?、?After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

　　五、雙重否定

　?、?Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　?、?Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　　六、修飾語、插入語的位置不當

　?、?The forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.

　?、?No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

　　七、意義含糊的先行詞

　　① The band members collected his and her uniforms.

　?、?The band members collected their uniforms.

　　八、介詞和冠詞的濫用

　?、?The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

　?、?The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

　　九、句子缺少成分

　?、?When aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.

　?、?When aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.

　　十、忘記斷句

　　① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

　　② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.