考研英語(yǔ)待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam:

　　Your sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam: I have got the message from internet(i大寫(xiě))which says your company needs a biologist. I wrote This(t小寫(xiě))letter to ask would I have the opportunity to have this job. I have graduated from GZ(不建議使用縮寫(xiě))University for two years, and I have got Yales P.D(不建議使用縮寫(xiě)) one month ago. All the above make me have the knowledge to cope this job. I worked as an experiment assistan My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to my resume for your review and consideration.

　　I am convinced that I am right person for the job in that the three point as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative could make me complete the task better which the company distribute.

　　I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to(forward作為動(dòng)詞講時(shí)是及物動(dòng)詞，去掉to)my resume for your review and consideration. I am convinced that I am(加定冠詞the)right person for the job in that the(去掉一個(gè)) three point(應(yīng)該用復(fù)數(shù)，因?yàn)槭侨齻€(gè))as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications(與上面的qualifications重復(fù)，如果有不同，應(yīng)該區(qū)別說(shuō)明) necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative(這里應(yīng)該用名詞) could make me complete the task better which the company distribute. I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：6-7分第二段需要更加簡(jiǎn)潔明朗，即條理清晰的列出內(nèi)容，同時(shí)句子要簡(jiǎn)潔。 t for two years,(加連詞and) therefore I have the ability of use biological apparatus. If I am possible to get this job please contact me, my email address is XXX@yahoo.com. Thank you for your time. Your(Yours)sincerely(加逗號(hào)) Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：6-7分寫(xiě)的還可以的，注意一下大小寫(xiě)和信件的格式?？荚嚭秃?jiǎn)歷中為了表示誠(chéng)意，不建議使用縮寫(xiě)。

　　考研英語(yǔ)待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam:

　　Your sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam: I have got the message from internet(i大寫(xiě))which says your company needs a biologist. I wrote This(t小寫(xiě))letter to ask would I have the opportunity to have this job. I have graduated from GZ(不建議使用縮寫(xiě))University for two years, and I have got Yales P.D(不建議使用縮寫(xiě)) one month ago. All the above make me have the knowledge to cope this job. I worked as an experiment assistan My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to my resume for your review and consideration.

　　I am convinced that I am right person for the job in that the three point as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative could make me complete the task better which the company distribute.

　　I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to(forward作為動(dòng)詞講時(shí)是及物動(dòng)詞，去掉to)my resume for your review and consideration. I am convinced that I am(加定冠詞the)right person for the job in that the(去掉一個(gè)) three point(應(yīng)該用復(fù)數(shù)，因?yàn)槭侨齻€(gè))as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications(與上面的qualifications重復(fù)，如果有不同，應(yīng)該區(qū)別說(shuō)明) necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative(這里應(yīng)該用名詞) could make me complete the task better which the company distribute. I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：6-7分第二段需要更加簡(jiǎn)潔明朗，即條理清晰的列出內(nèi)容，同時(shí)句子要簡(jiǎn)潔。 t for two years,(加連詞and) therefore I have the ability of use biological apparatus. If I am possible to get this job please contact me, my email address is XXX@yahoo.com. Thank you for your time. Your(Yours)sincerely(加逗號(hào)) Li Ming 點(diǎn)評(píng)：6-7分寫(xiě)的還可以的，注意一下大小寫(xiě)和信件的格式?？荚嚭秃?jiǎn)歷中為了表示誠(chéng)意，不建議使用縮寫(xiě)。