2024高考英語書面表達一輪訓練（3）附參考范文

　　??? 記敘文是以敘述人物的經歷或事物的發展變化過程為主的一種文體，是寫作訓練中最普遍、最基本的一種文體。記敘文要求學生根據所給情景，組織語言材料，編寫成文。一般說來記敘文有時間、地點、人物、事件、原因和結果六要素，寫作時要表達清楚。記人時，要注意介紹人物的身世、經歷和事跡等；敘事時要描寫事情發生和發展的過程及前因后果等。 【寫作點撥】 ??? 敘事類記敘文以敘述事件為主，突出事件發生、發展和解決的過程。在寫這類記敘文時要做到： ??? 1. 重組材料，確定要點。敘事類記敘文寫作前要進行立意、構思和選材等一系列過程，高考中的書面表達一般為控制性寫作,通常會提供短文的主題和寫作內容,考生要對提供的材料進行再加工,確定寫作的順序、要點和重點,擬定使用的句型和詞組。 ??? 2. 結構完整、前后呼應。寫記敘文必須有頭有尾，一般來說，記敘時要把與一件事有關的六要素都交代清楚。文章的主題和內容要一致，文章的結尾與開頭要呼應。 ??? 3. 人稱統一、線索明確。記敘文可用“你、我、他”三種人稱，但如果題目要求你使用某種人稱，則必須遵循要求；敘事類記敘文一般按照事件發展的前后順序進行敘述。 【常見問題】 ??? 1. 要點不全。要點是否齊全通常決定文章的檔次。書面表達要上檔次，要點齊全是關鍵。要點提示類書面表達一般不會出現這樣的問題，看圖作文則常會由于學生觀察不細心等原因遺漏要點。 ??? 2. 線索不清。有些短文條理混亂，主要原因是沒有確定好寫作線索。敘事類文章一般按時間順序來寫。 ??? 3. 時態不明。敘事時時態混亂是學生常犯的錯誤之一。敘事類記敘文所記的一般是過去發生的事，原則上用過去時，有時也用現在時。 ??? 4. 主次不分。有些同學寫作時平均用力，面面俱到，寫出來的東西主題不突出，顯得呆板乏味。 【佳作賞析】 ?請根據下面的要點敘述一次看馬戲的經歷。 ??? 1. 期中考試后放了三天假，我看了一場馬戲。 ??? 2.?? 表演非常精彩。有小狗表演，獨輪車表演等。最刺激的節目是走鋼絲。一個男演 ????? 員手里拿著一根平衡杠，頭上坐著一個女孩，肩上的鋼杠上還挑著兩個女孩。當他 ????? 小心翼翼走過鋼絲的時候，觀眾報以熱烈的掌聲。

　　??? 3. 馬戲是一種力與美結合的藝術。通過這次表演，我體會到了中國馬戲藝術的博大精 ?????? 深。 參考詞匯：馬戲表演circus show?? 刺激的thrilling?? ??? ?鋼絲tightrope?????? 平衡桿balancing pole?? ?鋼桿steel bar

　　???? Watching a circus show ? I had a three-day holiday after the mid-term examination, so I decided to relax myself by watching a circus show. ? A girl appeared on the stage. She rode a one-wheel bike on a small table with a lot of flowers on it. She didn’t knock down even one flower. Some little dogs also did a good job. The four little dogs did some amusing tricks and one of them could calculate the number! How clever they were! ? The most thrilling program was to see a young man walking on a tightrope. He stood on the very thin rope with a balancing pole on his hands. On his head sat a little girl. Another two girls sat on the ends of a steel bar on his shoulder. The young man took his first step with great care. The rope held. One step! Two, three.... Every viewer held his breath. All the people were anxious about his safety, because the young actor didn’t fasten a safety belt. Any little carelessness could cost his life! At last he succeeded in walking across the 8-meter-long tightrope. ? The performance lasted about two hours. I had a good time at the show. ? The circus is the art of combination of strength and beauty. The Chinese circus is so cool!

　　??? 小作者敘述了一次看馬戲的經歷。文章以時間為線索，敘述清楚，詳略得當，層次分明，描寫生動，過渡自然，顯示了作者相當扎實的語言功底。在文章最后，小作者還談了自己的感想，深化了主題。難能可貴的是小作者使用了較多的高級表達方式，使文章增彩不少。如：復合形容詞（onewheel, 8-meter-long），with復合結構（with a balancing pole on his hands），倒裝句（On his head sat a little girl），感嘆句（How clever they were!）等。 【鞏固訓練】 ?? 假定你在開學的第一周參加了軍訓，請按下面的提示用英語敘述你軍訓第一天的情況。 ?? 1. 當起床鈴響起的時候，我還在睡夢之中。我迅速起床，穿好衣服，匆忙趕往操場。教官要求我們在五分鐘內完成準備動作。 ?? 2. 教官對我們要求非常嚴格。一個動作要反復操練一直到他滿意為止，但休息時，他和我們一起唱歌、跳舞、講故事。我們相處得非常融洽。 ?? 3. 訓練非常艱苦。太陽很毒，我全身都濕透了，但我們還得繼續訓練。其中還有位同學暈倒了。 ?? 4. 軍訓既增強了我們的體質，也磨練了我們克服困難的意志。 注意: 1. 詞數: 100-150左右 ????? 2. 參考詞匯: 軍訓 military training 教官 drillmaster ??????? （參考答案） Key1:

　　?????????????????? The first day of the military training

　　? Yesterday was the first day of the military training. I was dreaming when the bell for getting up rang. The moment I heard the bell, I rose immediately, dressed quickly and then rushed to the playground. The drillmaster asked us to finish preparations within only five minutes. ? The drillmaster was very strict with us. We had to drill an action again and again until he was satisfied. At break time, he joined us in singing, dancing and telling stories. We were getting along very well.? The sun was so strong that my clothes were all wet. But we still went on drilling. One of my classmates fell to the ground in a faint.? ? The life of the military training is very hard, but I think it is meaningful. Not only does it build up our bodies, it also strengthens our determination to overcome difficulties.

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　　假設你將要參加學校舉辦的英語作文比賽，請你根據右圖，寫一篇120詞左右的英語作文。內容包括：

　　1．描述圖畫的主要內容；

　　2．分析出現這種現象的原因；

　　3．談談我們應該如何保護地球，拯救野生動物。

　　參考詞匯：北極熊polar bear；企鵝penguin

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　　參考范文：

　　From the picture we can see a polar bear sitting on a small piece of ice with a penguin on its head.It shows that our environment is worsening day by day and some wild animals are in great danger.

　　In recent years，with the development of science and technology，the Earth is faced with a variety of environmental problems，including global warming.As a result，many animals have lost their natural habitat.

　　I think it is time that we took effective measures to protect the environment.We should avoid using fossil fuel to reduce green house gas，and we can plant more trees to take in carbon dioxide.

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　　假如你是新華中學的一名學生。你校擬招聘一名外籍教師。請根據下面的要求寫一篇招聘啟事。

　　對應聘者的要求：1．母語是英語，大學畢業；

　　2．身體健康，交際能力強；

　　3．有教學經驗者優先，工資面議。

　　工作條件：1．學校交通便利，環境優美；

　　2．每周工作五天，提供住宿。

　　有意者請在八月底之前聯系李老師。聯系電話：010-88663528或發郵件至：Mrli2011@sohu.com。

　　注意：1．詞數120左右；

　　2．參考詞匯：應聘者applicant。

　　English Teacher Wanted

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　　參考范文：

　　English Teacher Wanted

　　Xinhua Middle School plans to invite a foreigner to work as a teacher of English.The applicant should be a native speaker of English and has graduated from university.He or she should be healthy physically and mentally，with great ability to communicate with students.Teaching experience is preferred.He or she has to work 5 days a week.

　　Xinhua Middle School lies near the center of the city，so the traffic is very convenient.There is an apartment for foreign teachers to live in.

　　If you are interested，please contact Mr Li at Mrli2011@sohu.com before the end of August，2024．The salary can be discussed during the interview.

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　　***寫作指導*********

　　多使用過渡性詞語。這樣使文章更加連貫、更具有邏輯性。

　　（1）表示增加的過渡詞：also，and，and then，too，in addition，furthermore，moreover，again，on top ofthat，another，first second third等。

　　（2）表示時間順序的過渡詞：now，then，before，after，afterwards，earlier，lat er，immediately，soon，next，in afew days，gradually，suddenly，finally等。（3）表示空間順序的過渡詞：near（to），far（from），in frontof，behind，beside，beyond，above，below，tothe right left，around，outside等。

　　（4）表示比較的過渡詞：in thesameway，justlike，justas等。

　　（5）表示對照的過渡詞：but，still，yet，however，on theotherhand，onthecon trary，in spite of，even though等。

　　（6）表示結 果 和 原 因 的 過 渡 詞：because，since，so，as a result，therefore，then，thus，otherwise等。

　　（7）表示目的的過渡詞：forthisreason，forthispurpose，so that等。

　　（8）表示強調的過渡詞：in fact，indeed，surely，necessarily，certainly，withoutanydoubt，truly，torepeat，aboveall，mostimportant等。

　　（9）表示解釋說明的過渡詞：forexample，in fact，in thiscase，foractually等。

　　（10）表示總結的過渡詞：finally，atlast，inconclusion，asIhaveshown，inoth erword，in brief，in short，in general，on the whole，ashasbeen stated等。

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　　作文（***）

　　每年高三學生在高考結束后都會有一個近三個月的假期。對于如何度過這個假100詞左右的短文，簡要陳述學生的意向，并說明你自己的觀點。

　　意向

　　45％ 在家充分休息

　　28％ 學習英語，為上大學做準備

　　15％ 到外地旅游

　　12％ 其他

　　注意：為使行文連貫，可適當增加細節。

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　　One possible version：

　　Recently a survey has been conducted among the students in Grade Three about what they will do during the 3-month holiday after the College Entrance Exam．Students have different decisions．

　　About 45％of the surveyed students intend to rest at home．They want to relax

　　thoroughly and get ready for college life．While 28％of them prefer to attend ErIglish classes for their future use．Meanwhile，15％of them choose to travel outside and the rest l2％say that they’d like to do other things．After all．it's really difficult to get such a long holiday again after tlley enter the college．

　　Personally，1 will be a little sad if I get away from my dearest parents and relatives，so’d like to stay at home and spend more time witlI my families．. 為紀念汶川大地震三周年，某英文報發起關于災區新貌的征文活動。請根據以下圖片提示，以“Great Changes”為題，用英語寫一篇短文應征。內容要點如下：

　　1.某中學災后三年來的變化，如教學與活動場所，以及師生精神面貌等；

　　2.發生變化的原因；

　　3.你的感想。

　　注意：

　　1.短文標題與開頭已給出，不計入總詞數；

　　2.可根據圖片提示適當發揮

　　3.詞數：120左右

　　Great Changes

　　I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past three years.

　　laboratory buildings, and a library. There is also a newly-built standard playground. In the new environment, teachers and students are living happily and working hard. It is really amazing that the once-mined place has now been turned into a beautiful school, full of life.

　　Obviously, without the help of the whole society, there would be no new school today. It is love and concern that have brought about the great changes. Many hands make light work. We can work wonders if we unite as a family, caring for each other and helping those in need. Union is strength.

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　　2024高考英語書面表達一輪訓練（3）附參考范文

　　??? 記敘文是以敘述人物的經歷或事物的發展變化過程為主的一種文體，是寫作訓練中最普遍、最基本的一種文體。記敘文要求學生根據所給情景，組織語言材料，編寫成文。一般說來記敘文有時間、地點、人物、事件、原因和結果六要素，寫作時要表達清楚。記人時，要注意介紹人物的身世、經歷和事跡等；敘事時要描寫事情發生和發展的過程及前因后果等。 【寫作點撥】 ??? 敘事類記敘文以敘述事件為主，突出事件發生、發展和解決的過程。在寫這類記敘文時要做到： ??? 1. 重組材料，確定要點。敘事類記敘文寫作前要進行立意、構思和選材等一系列過程，高考中的書面表達一般為控制性寫作,通常會提供短文的主題和寫作內容,考生要對提供的材料進行再加工,確定寫作的順序、要點和重點,擬定使用的句型和詞組。 ??? 2. 結構完整、前后呼應。寫記敘文必須有頭有尾，一般來說，記敘時要把與一件事有關的六要素都交代清楚。文章的主題和內容要一致，文章的結尾與開頭要呼應。 ??? 3. 人稱統一、線索明確。記敘文可用“你、我、他”三種人稱，但如果題目要求你使用某種人稱，則必須遵循要求；敘事類記敘文一般按照事件發展的前后順序進行敘述。 【常見問題】 ??? 1. 要點不全。要點是否齊全通常決定文章的檔次。書面表達要上檔次，要點齊全是關鍵。要點提示類書面表達一般不會出現這樣的問題，看圖作文則常會由于學生觀察不細心等原因遺漏要點。 ??? 2. 線索不清。有些短文條理混亂，主要原因是沒有確定好寫作線索。敘事類文章一般按時間順序來寫。 ??? 3. 時態不明。敘事時時態混亂是學生常犯的錯誤之一。敘事類記敘文所記的一般是過去發生的事，原則上用過去時，有時也用現在時。 ??? 4. 主次不分。有些同學寫作時平均用力，面面俱到，寫出來的東西主題不突出，顯得呆板乏味。 【佳作賞析】 ?請根據下面的要點敘述一次看馬戲的經歷。 ??? 1. 期中考試后放了三天假，我看了一場馬戲。 ??? 2.?? 表演非常精彩。有小狗表演，獨輪車表演等。最刺激的節目是走鋼絲。一個男演 ????? 員手里拿著一根平衡杠，頭上坐著一個女孩，肩上的鋼杠上還挑著兩個女孩。當他 ????? 小心翼翼走過鋼絲的時候，觀眾報以熱烈的掌聲。

　　??? 3. 馬戲是一種力與美結合的藝術。通過這次表演，我體會到了中國馬戲藝術的博大精 ?????? 深。 參考詞匯：馬戲表演circus show?? 刺激的thrilling?? ??? ?鋼絲tightrope?????? 平衡桿balancing pole?? ?鋼桿steel bar

　　???? Watching a circus show ? I had a three-day holiday after the mid-term examination, so I decided to relax myself by watching a circus show. ? A girl appeared on the stage. She rode a one-wheel bike on a small table with a lot of flowers on it. She didn’t knock down even one flower. Some little dogs also did a good job. The four little dogs did some amusing tricks and one of them could calculate the number! How clever they were! ? The most thrilling program was to see a young man walking on a tightrope. He stood on the very thin rope with a balancing pole on his hands. On his head sat a little girl. Another two girls sat on the ends of a steel bar on his shoulder. The young man took his first step with great care. The rope held. One step! Two, three.... Every viewer held his breath. All the people were anxious about his safety, because the young actor didn’t fasten a safety belt. Any little carelessness could cost his life! At last he succeeded in walking across the 8-meter-long tightrope. ? The performance lasted about two hours. I had a good time at the show. ? The circus is the art of combination of strength and beauty. The Chinese circus is so cool!

　　??? 小作者敘述了一次看馬戲的經歷。文章以時間為線索，敘述清楚，詳略得當，層次分明，描寫生動，過渡自然，顯示了作者相當扎實的語言功底。在文章最后，小作者還談了自己的感想，深化了主題。難能可貴的是小作者使用了較多的高級表達方式，使文章增彩不少。如：復合形容詞（onewheel, 8-meter-long），with復合結構（with a balancing pole on his hands），倒裝句（On his head sat a little girl），感嘆句（How clever they were!）等。 【鞏固訓練】 ?? 假定你在開學的第一周參加了軍訓，請按下面的提示用英語敘述你軍訓第一天的情況。 ?? 1. 當起床鈴響起的時候，我還在睡夢之中。我迅速起床，穿好衣服，匆忙趕往操場。教官要求我們在五分鐘內完成準備動作。 ?? 2. 教官對我們要求非常嚴格。一個動作要反復操練一直到他滿意為止，但休息時，他和我們一起唱歌、跳舞、講故事。我們相處得非常融洽。 ?? 3. 訓練非常艱苦。太陽很毒，我全身都濕透了，但我們還得繼續訓練。其中還有位同學暈倒了。 ?? 4. 軍訓既增強了我們的體質，也磨練了我們克服困難的意志。 注意: 1. 詞數: 100-150左右 ????? 2. 參考詞匯: 軍訓 military training 教官 drillmaster ??????? （參考答案） Key1:

　　?????????????????? The first day of the military training

　　? Yesterday was the first day of the military training. I was dreaming when the bell for getting up rang. The moment I heard the bell, I rose immediately, dressed quickly and then rushed to the playground. The drillmaster asked us to finish preparations within only five minutes. ? The drillmaster was very strict with us. We had to drill an action again and again until he was satisfied. At break time, he joined us in singing, dancing and telling stories. We were getting along very well.? The sun was so strong that my clothes were all wet. But we still went on drilling. One of my classmates fell to the ground in a faint.? ? The life of the military training is very hard, but I think it is meaningful. Not only does it build up our bodies, it also strengthens our determination to overcome difficulties.

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　　假設你將要參加學校舉辦的英語作文比賽，請你根據右圖，寫一篇120詞左右的英語作文。內容包括：

　　1．描述圖畫的主要內容；

　　2．分析出現這種現象的原因；

　　3．談談我們應該如何保護地球，拯救野生動物。

　　參考詞匯：北極熊polar bear；企鵝penguin

　　________________________________________________________________________

　　________________________________________________________________________

　　________________________________________________________________________

　　參考范文：

　　From the picture we can see a polar bear sitting on a small piece of ice with a penguin on its head.It shows that our environment is worsening day by day and some wild animals are in great danger.

　　In recent years，with the development of science and technology，the Earth is faced with a variety of environmental problems，including global warming.As a result，many animals have lost their natural habitat.

　　I think it is time that we took effective measures to protect the environment.We should avoid using fossil fuel to reduce green house gas，and we can plant more trees to take in carbon dioxide.

　　*********************************************************結束

　　假如你是新華中學的一名學生。你校擬招聘一名外籍教師。請根據下面的要求寫一篇招聘啟事。

　　對應聘者的要求：1．母語是英語，大學畢業；

　　2．身體健康，交際能力強；

　　3．有教學經驗者優先，工資面議。

　　工作條件：1．學校交通便利，環境優美；

　　2．每周工作五天，提供住宿。

　　有意者請在八月底之前聯系李老師。聯系電話：010-88663528或發郵件至：Mrli2011@sohu.com。

　　注意：1．詞數120左右；

　　2．參考詞匯：應聘者applicant。

　　English Teacher Wanted

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　　參考范文：

　　English Teacher Wanted

　　Xinhua Middle School plans to invite a foreigner to work as a teacher of English.The applicant should be a native speaker of English and has graduated from university.He or she should be healthy physically and mentally，with great ability to communicate with students.Teaching experience is preferred.He or she has to work 5 days a week.

　　Xinhua Middle School lies near the center of the city，so the traffic is very convenient.There is an apartment for foreign teachers to live in.

　　If you are interested，please contact Mr Li at Mrli2011@sohu.com before the end of August，2024．The salary can be discussed during the interview.

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　　***寫作指導*********

　　多使用過渡性詞語。這樣使文章更加連貫、更具有邏輯性。

　　（1）表示增加的過渡詞：also，and，and then，too，in addition，furthermore，moreover，again，on top ofthat，another，first second third等。

　　（2）表示時間順序的過渡詞：now，then，before，after，afterwards，earlier，lat er，immediately，soon，next，in afew days，gradually，suddenly，finally等。（3）表示空間順序的過渡詞：near（to），far（from），in frontof，behind，beside，beyond，above，below，tothe right left，around，outside等。

　　（4）表示比較的過渡詞：in thesameway，justlike，justas等。

　　（5）表示對照的過渡詞：but，still，yet，however，on theotherhand，onthecon trary，in spite of，even though等。

　　（6）表示結 果 和 原 因 的 過 渡 詞：because，since，so，as a result，therefore，then，thus，otherwise等。

　　（7）表示目的的過渡詞：forthisreason，forthispurpose，so that等。

　　（8）表示強調的過渡詞：in fact，indeed，surely，necessarily，certainly，withoutanydoubt，truly，torepeat，aboveall，mostimportant等。

　　（9）表示解釋說明的過渡詞：forexample，in fact，in thiscase，foractually等。

　　（10）表示總結的過渡詞：finally，atlast，inconclusion，asIhaveshown，inoth erword，in brief，in short，in general，on the whole，ashasbeen stated等。

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　　作文（***）

　　每年高三學生在高考結束后都會有一個近三個月的假期。對于如何度過這個假100詞左右的短文，簡要陳述學生的意向，并說明你自己的觀點。

　　意向

　　45％ 在家充分休息

　　28％ 學習英語，為上大學做準備

　　15％ 到外地旅游

　　12％ 其他

　　注意：為使行文連貫，可適當增加細節。

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　　One possible version：

　　Recently a survey has been conducted among the students in Grade Three about what they will do during the 3-month holiday after the College Entrance Exam．Students have different decisions．

　　About 45％of the surveyed students intend to rest at home．They want to relax

　　thoroughly and get ready for college life．While 28％of them prefer to attend ErIglish classes for their future use．Meanwhile，15％of them choose to travel outside and the rest l2％say that they’d like to do other things．After all．it's really difficult to get such a long holiday again after tlley enter the college．

　　Personally，1 will be a little sad if I get away from my dearest parents and relatives，so’d like to stay at home and spend more time witlI my families．. 為紀念汶川大地震三周年，某英文報發起關于災區新貌的征文活動。請根據以下圖片提示，以“Great Changes”為題，用英語寫一篇短文應征。內容要點如下：

　　1.某中學災后三年來的變化，如教學與活動場所，以及師生精神面貌等；

　　2.發生變化的原因；

　　3.你的感想。

　　注意：

　　1.短文標題與開頭已給出，不計入總詞數；

　　2.可根據圖片提示適當發揮

　　3.詞數：120左右

　　Great Changes

　　I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past three years.

　　laboratory buildings, and a library. There is also a newly-built standard playground. In the new environment, teachers and students are living happily and working hard. It is really amazing that the once-mined place has now been turned into a beautiful school, full of life.

　　Obviously, without the help of the whole society, there would be no new school today. It is love and concern that have brought about the great changes. Many hands make light work. We can work wonders if we unite as a family, caring for each other and helping those in need. Union is strength.

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