考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I would be much grateful to be employed by you as a designer of consumer electronic products for your corporation which is posted in China Daily.I appreciate the opportunity of working in your firm with you and other colleagues.The experiences will be unforgettable throughout my life.

　　There are a resume and some other cover letters in the E-mail to be downloaded.Thank you for your time and consideration.I look forward to hearing from you soon.

　　Yours Sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, I would be much grateful to be employed by you as a designer of consumer electronic products for your corporation which is posted in China Daily. I appreciate the opportunity of working in your firm with you and other colleagues. The experiences will be unforgettable throughout my life. To begin with, as a young man whose primary interest is in electronics, I find the job does fall in with my previous training and strength. I, therefore, decide to apply for the position. Moreover, I have ever accomplished some projects, such as the remote car in the National Undergraduate Electronic Design Contest. There are a resume and some other cover letters in the E-mail to be downloaded. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.Yours Sincerely(加逗號) Li Ming(要在右下角) 點評：7分錯誤比較少，但是第一段不夠簡潔，尤其是第一段的后半部分，第二段的內容需要更加充實、明確一些。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I would be much grateful to be employed by you as a designer of consumer electronic products for your corporation which is posted in China Daily.I appreciate the opportunity of working in your firm with you and other colleagues.The experiences will be unforgettable throughout my life.

　　There are a resume and some other cover letters in the E-mail to be downloaded.Thank you for your time and consideration.I look forward to hearing from you soon.

　　Yours Sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, I would be much grateful to be employed by you as a designer of consumer electronic products for your corporation which is posted in China Daily. I appreciate the opportunity of working in your firm with you and other colleagues. The experiences will be unforgettable throughout my life. To begin with, as a young man whose primary interest is in electronics, I find the job does fall in with my previous training and strength. I, therefore, decide to apply for the position. Moreover, I have ever accomplished some projects, such as the remote car in the National Undergraduate Electronic Design Contest. There are a resume and some other cover letters in the E-mail to be downloaded. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.Yours Sincerely(加逗號) Li Ming(要在右下角) 點評：7分錯誤比較少，但是第一段不夠簡潔，尤其是第一段的后半部分，第二段的內容需要更加充實、明確一些。