寫作原文

　　The duck mother, who is anxious and energetic, is begging the monkey teacher to teach her children the approach of climbing tree, which give him a fright. Conspicuously, that is a deliciousironicdepiction concerning blind education,a phenomenon pervasive in contemporary society.This overwhelming, occupy with various kinds of irrational behaviors over children, ledus to conclude that the blind education is more of a devastation to childrens faculties than a reasonable practice. This kind of aimless education kids exposed to tend to be in domestic situation, by, unfortunately, their own parents, who exert great pressure on childrens already over-burdened small shoulder. More ridiculously, many parents know that countless flaws are consist in this way of education and yet most did litter to change it. There are upsetting parallels today, as parents one wave after another force their little kids participate in various kinds of out-class courses, as a result, their vulnerable heart become occupied with depression and anxious.The clear message is that we should get moving to protect our children. Firstly,suitable atmosphere must be created, where our kid can grow freely in harmonious, by us, especially the parents. Moreover, the authorities should charge with the obligation of fashioning the idea that education entails more than simply teach children numerous disciplines. Rather, making full display of childrens advantage and timely adjustment is of substantial weight. Only by doing this, can we weather this crisis.

　　總體點評

　　文章在句子組織方面，存在一些問題。作者應該注意句子的正確表達，弄清楚句子的成分，句與句之間的邏輯關系等。建議作者從句子練起，每周可花幾天積累詞匯、經典語句，然后自己根據積累的情況仿寫句子。在做真題時，注意長難句解析，鞏固基本的語法知識，達到自我提高的目的。加油吧，祝你考研成功!

　　寫作原文

　　The duck mother, who is anxious and energetic, is begging the monkey teacher to teach her children the approach of climbing tree, which give him a fright. Conspicuously, that is a deliciousironicdepiction concerning blind education,a phenomenon pervasive in contemporary society.This overwhelming, occupy with various kinds of irrational behaviors over children, ledus to conclude that the blind education is more of a devastation to childrens faculties than a reasonable practice. This kind of aimless education kids exposed to tend to be in domestic situation, by, unfortunately, their own parents, who exert great pressure on childrens already over-burdened small shoulder. More ridiculously, many parents know that countless flaws are consist in this way of education and yet most did litter to change it. There are upsetting parallels today, as parents one wave after another force their little kids participate in various kinds of out-class courses, as a result, their vulnerable heart become occupied with depression and anxious.The clear message is that we should get moving to protect our children. Firstly,suitable atmosphere must be created, where our kid can grow freely in harmonious, by us, especially the parents. Moreover, the authorities should charge with the obligation of fashioning the idea that education entails more than simply teach children numerous disciplines. Rather, making full display of childrens advantage and timely adjustment is of substantial weight. Only by doing this, can we weather this crisis.

　　總體點評

　　文章在句子組織方面，存在一些問題。作者應該注意句子的正確表達，弄清楚句子的成分，句與句之間的邏輯關系等。建議作者從句子練起，每周可花幾天積累詞匯、經典語句，然后自己根據積累的情況仿寫句子。在做真題時，注意長難句解析，鞏固基本的語法知識，達到自我提高的目的。加油吧，祝你考研成功!